Reveal Character with Dialogue

Characterization and dialogue are two storytelling techniques I sometimes think of as separated at birth. You can’t adequately portray character without dialogue: It’s essential to creating characters who come alive in ways they wouldn’t if you were telling the story in simple exposition.

I write about dialogue and characterization in November’s The Writer magazine (pick up a copy on the newsstand!). Passages from Ernest Hemingway’s short story “Hills Like White Elephants,” Mary Karr’s The Liars’ Club, and Frank McCourt’s Angela’s Ashes show how dialogue can move the story forward while providing compelling and critical information about the characters.

Dialogue is one of the most powerful tools in your writer’s toolbox. It reveals character in ways narrative can’t. We can hear the Southern drawl or the German accent. We can see the petulance or pride, feel the reticence or ignorance, experience the fear or the frailty.

And if you can master subtext – revealing character through that which is not said – your prose will be stronger still.

One of my favorite writing teachers is novelist Davida Wills Hurwin, who teaches high school theater in Los Angeles. It was in one of Davida’s workshops where I fully grasped the concept of subtext.

She had two people act out a scene in which they were not allowed to say explicitly what the issue was between them. The set-up was they were a couple who had been married for a number of years: He wanted children; she didn’t. She became pregnant, but wanted an abortion. He fervently wanted her to have the child. In the scene, neither was allowed to directly mention the abortion. It was a very intense improvisation, which quickly got heated and almost out of control until Davida stepped in. The woman and man who were playing the parts got deeply into their characters, and let the emotion of the situation flow.

Another time, Davida had us act out scenes from a work in progress. I brought a scene from a YA novel I’d been working on about a young girl who is paralyzed in a car accident in which her mother dies. The scene is between the girl and her father. After reading the scene, Davida had two people from the workshop toss the notes aside and improvise. What happened surprised and amazed me. The young woman who was playing my protagonist put herself fully into the person of a 13-year-old in a wheelchair, in grief over her mom’s death, resentful of her own survival, agonized over her paralysis, angry at her dad for not being able to save them from their fates. I was in tears at the end, and I understood so much more about my character than when we began.

If we can bring those emotions to the surface in our writing, to make our readers feel them as acutely as we do, that’s the stuff of great literature.

Gather some friends and bring your characters alive with exercises like these. Your stories will be more compelling because of it.

Images from Ghost Ranch - AROHO 2011

I've been meaning to post some of these photos from our extraordinary week at A Room of Her Own Foundation's biannual retreat at Ghost Ranch in New Mexico in early August. The stunning landscape only enhanced the wonderful friendships and connections that were made between the talented women who attended. Hope you enjoy these!

Late afternoon sky at Ghost Ranch

Marianela Medrano-Marra

Aine Greaney and Barbara Rockman

Pedernales - Georgia O'Keefe's favorite mountain

Our final night together; 90 women strong

Red rock at sunset

Breena Clarke, Marianela and Esther Cohen

Afternoon moon over Ghost Ranch

Kate Gale at AROHO: Play, Trust, Write

Kate Gale is a force of nature. Co-founder and managing editor of Red Hen Press, editor of the Los Angeles Review and president of the American Composers Forum, Los Angeles, she is a teacher, poet, novelist and playwright. She is also a board member of A Room of Her Own Foundation, which sponsors the weeklong biannual women writers’ retreat in New Mexico from which I just returned. She offered several workshops during the retreat, but one in particular I found particularly compelling and want to share with you here.

What she said, in essence, is this: Play, Trust, Write.

We writers take things so seriously. We sit down to write and expect a finished product. When it doesn’t seem to come, we get anxious, even distraught. Kate says just relax. Play! Approach your daily writing with lightness, with no expectation, with playfulness. (There will always be time for the hard work of revision later.)

Trust! That something amazing will emerge. That eventually, through journaling or just writing what comes, something important will emerge.

If you write something important, it will be at the intersection of imagination and intellect. Get rid of the “writing is not important” chatter in your head. Trust that what you are creating is worthwhile and worthy.

And, Kate said, be willing to have a relationship with silence. I spend at least an hour every morning with my journal, in silent testimony, in silent prayer, in silent entreaty to the universe to bring insight, words, extraordinary thought to the paper in front of me. Sometimes it eludes me; often it brings the grace of creativity and concrete movement: words – amazing, inspiring, powerful words.

In every writing project, Kate said, ask yourself, “What is it that I want to say?” Then find the most unusual, extraordinary and motivational way to say it you can imagine.

Because imagination coupled with intellect is the writer’s only true gift, a gift that can inform and inspire. So go on, inform, inspire – write!

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Reading Inspiration at the Electric Lodge

Every night during my master's residency at Antioch University in LA, we have student and guest author readings, and Sunday night our readings were held at the eclectic Electric Lodge in Venice. Funky, off-the-beaten-track, small and intimate, the Electric Lodge is the perfect spot for performance poetry and readings.
Four graduating students started the evening, with powerful readings of poetry, nonfiction and fiction.
Learning how to present your work and read in public is an important skill, a critical diagnostic tool that gives the writer/reader specific feedback on not only the work but the effectiveness of the delivery. 
I tell my students it's important to read one's work out loud. It helps pinpoint problems in rhythm, voice, cadence and logic. And it forces the writer to engage the material as a reader, which can reveal unresolved questions and pitfalls in the narrative.
I have spoken to many groups over the years, but reading my own work sparked feelings of terror and inadequacy like nothing I've ever done. The more you do it, the better you get at it. And the more you can learn from it.
Rounding out the evening at Electric Lodge were readings by Rob Roberge and Peter Selgin, accomplished authors and scholars who this semester have joined the adjunct faculty at Antioch.
Roberge, the author of two novels and numerous literary magazine pieces, read from his forthcoming noir novel, Working Backwards from the Worst Moment of My Life, a hilarious and twisted story about two junkies so desperate for money they dig up the grave of one's grandmother to steal and pawn her gold jewelry. As Roberge read, the audience both guffawed and cringed at the horrific nature of the men's task. His prose was so strong, so descriptive, we were with these two losers throughout the awful deed, from falling through the top of the casket and listening to the grandmother's hip splinter, to squirming as they fished around what once was her neck to find her gold necklace. In the end, we were laughing and exclaiming "ewwwww!" at the same time. That's some awesome writing.
Selgin, the author of Drowning Lessons (winner of the 2007 Flannery O'Connor Award for Fiction) and the novel Life Goes to the Movies, read from his forthcoming memoir Confessions of a Left-Handed Man, which will be published this year by the University of Iowa Press/Sightline Books. He is also the author of two books on craft: By Cunning & Craft and 179 Ways to Save a Novel: Matters of Vital Concern to Fiction Writers.
Selgin's poignant and wry account of his best friends in junior high, including the notorious liar Victor, had the audience roaring with laughter, but also wistful over the evocation of that tender time when we cling to falsehoods, because that's the only safe thing to do.
Read your writing to yourself. Give voice to it and listen. If you can read it to a group, all the better. It's instructive for the writing, but also a powerful way to find your own voice and learn how to express it with strength and confidence. Isn't that what we all want in the end? A voice?

Self-publishing Might be for You

As the publishing world continues to morph and change in response to economic and technological pressures and opportunities, self-publishing - for some writers - becomes an attractive option. In fact, the longest chapter in my book, Navigating the Rough Waters of Today's Publishing World, Critical Advice for Writers from Industry Insiders (Quill Driver Press, 2010), is about self-publishing. Print-on-demand technology and the explosion in e-books makes self-publishing a more viable option than traditional, especially for authors who already have an established platform.

When your book is accepted by a traditional publisher, the publishing house provides certain services, including editing, cover and content design, production, distribution to booksellers, and some—often minimal—level of promotion. The publisher not only pays you an advance of some amount, but also assumes all the costs of editing, designing, producing, and distributing, the book, as well as spending money marketing it. As the author, in this scenario, you are paid royalties. All other profits go to the publisher.

If you self-publish, you pay for the privilege upfront but get to keep 100 percent of the profits on any sales. However, the cost can range from several hundred dollars to more than $10,000, depending on the type of self-publishing you choose. And that should be dictated by the kind of book you’ve written, your skills (of lack thereof) in producing a published work, and what your goals are as an author.

Why, exactly, do you want your book published? Do you seek attention? Do you want to use the book to support other work, like speaking? Is it because you want to leave a family history for your children and grandchildren? Perhaps you’re tired of banging your head against the traditional publishers’ doors and you have a well-thought-out plan for promotion and marketing. Or you may have expertise in a field that is too narrow for a larger publisher to consider, for example, how to repair electric razors.

If you write fiction, you should first exhaust all efforts to get an agent and win a traditional contract. But if all efforts fail, by all means consider self-publishing. There are some wonderful stories of self-published books that were picked up by traditional publishers and became best-sellers (Christopher Paolini's Eragon is one example), but honestly, that's rare.

Self-publishing makes more sense for a nonfiction title that has a particular niche and whose author has the resources and ability to spend a lot of time marketing it.

Online POD Publishing

The newer print-on-demand companies that operate online and often refer to themselves as publishers, such as iUniverse and Lulu, offer most of the services of a traditional publisher either on an a la carte basis or in packages for which you pay a fee.

If you have a memoir or family history you want to produce in limited quantities for family and friends, this is a good option. Since you can produce one book at a time, there’s no need to print and store a large stock of books. Each book can be printed as it’s ordered online. This is also a good choice if you are a hobbyist and want to produce a limited number of informational or how-to books that you want to sell online.

But beware. Most people in the publishing and entertainment industry consider books published by iUniverse and Lulu and similar publishers as substandard.

Subsidy Publishing

If you make a living writing for other publications but want to produce a nonfiction title to either subsidize your primary work or establish credibility as an expert in a particular area, subsidy press publishing is a good option. This is also a good choice for business and inspirational speakers. A book confers instant credibility for speakers, who then can sell them “from the back of the room” at speaking engagements.

A quality subsidy press is a good place to start. Under a typical co-publisher agreement with a small press, the author pays all the major production costs, including typesetting, printing and binding. The publisher provides editorial services like editing, proofreading and jacket copy; production services like design and typesetting; marketing services like press releases, brochures, sending out review copies, sales and fulfillment; and distribution to bookstores and online retailers.

The print run is typically short, in the five hundred- to two-thousand-copy range. All copies are the property of the author, who receives a royalty of, say, 60 percent of all net receipts on book and subsidiary rights sales.

Unfortunately, this rarely turns out to be a money-making venture for the author. You have to have a very good reason to see your book in print.

Traditional Self-publishing

Before online POD publishers appeared, self-publishing truly meant the author published the book on his or her own, from typesetting to arranging for printing and distribution.

This is a good choice for writers who produce how-to and self-help books, histories of obscure people or widgets, or books that have a very narrow but perhaps healthy following, for example people who collect antique clocks.

It’s also a good option for writers who publish in newspapers and magazines but want a book to increase visibility. The key is know-how.

If you decide true self-publishing is for you, read The Self-Publishing Manual, Dan Poynter’s Self-Publishing Manual Vol. 2 (parapublishing.com). Poynter believes the current revolution in publishing will permanently alter the playing field, empowering writers and allowing them to put their work directly into the hands of the reading public.

But this kind of self-publishing is not for the faint of heart. If you have the design, production and printing experience and knowledge, go for it. You should also read Morris Rosenthal (fonerbooks.com) and Aaron Shepard’s (newselfpublishing.com) books on the process.

Rosenthal’s book, Print-on-Demand Book Publishing: A New Approach To Printing And Marketing Books For Publishers And Self-Publishing Authors, provides exhaustive information on the process of print-on-demand publishing.

Shepard’s book, Aiming at Amazon: The NEW Business of Self Publishing, or How to Publish Your Books with Print on Demand and Online Book Marketing on Amazon.com, explains in great detail how to use Amazon to sell and distribute your book.

Whether you self-publish fiction or nonfiction, be careful with whom you do business. Mark Levine’s The Fine Print of Self-Publishing compares 45 self-publishing companies, from online services to lesser-known quality subsidy presses. It also tells you what to look for in a self-publisher, explains contracts and pinpoints specific companies you should avoid.

In the end, nonfiction writers can benefit from self-publishing more than - at least for now - fiction writers. But the publishing world changes every day, and more and more already successful authors are turning to self-publishing platforms like Amazon, Scribd and Smashwords. As always, know what you want to accomplish and do your homework.

(I'll be offering consultations on self-publishing at the A Room of Her Own biannual Writers' Retreat at Ghost Ranch in New Mexico from Aug. 8-14.)